You probably could have just changed the name of your other thread, rather than starting a new one.
I do like that model, though. It might have been a better idea to have folded the larger penguin for the video, though, especially since the camera doesn't focus well when zoomed in.
Your voice sounds similar to my little brother's voice, but it's very hard to hear you. If it's possible to record the voice-over separately, it would certainly improve the clarity when folding something with crinkly paper.
Also, seeing that a huge amount of paper is "wasted", you could try to use the opposite corner to fold the head of a killer whale, so that it looks like it's coming out of the water...
However, in all honesty, for this model, a video seems like overkill. It's not easy to hear you, and it's hard to see the model clearly, so diagrams would have been better, I think.
From what I can tell, you're too close to the camera. It's focused behind the model (and your hands), and it can't focus any closer. It's a common problem with most cameras (still and video).
If your camera has a macro/close-up setting, you should use it.
Also, talking and handling noisy paper at the same time isn't a good idea.
Finally, I would suggest that your voice sounds weird for a couple of reasons; firstly, you're probably not used to hearing your own voice, which is always strange, but mostly, you sound more nervous than anything. If you continue to make videos and talk, your confidence should grow and your voice will sound better.
It's a good first try, though, so please don't be discouraged by my comments, I mean them to be constructive.